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    dots Submission Name: No one would ... & Confusiondots

    Author: Silent_Tears
    ASL Info:    16/f/BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 90/111/59
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 767
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    A couple of days ago I started to search for my old poetry book, so I can make a newer updated one. Here is some poems from the old one. I wrote this poem when I first started poetry, I'm not sure what I was feeling at the time.

    *Let it Flow*

    P.s. One thing I can tell you is though around the time of many of these poems, I was feeling lonely, sad, depressed, forgotton etc.

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    dotsNo one would ... & Confusiondots

    No one Would ...

    If the tides were to turn as swift as they came
    No one would notice
    If the eyes were to become empty
    No one would care
    If the sol was to to become dark
    No one would see
    If the water weas to become blood red
    They would turn thier cheek

    All around us
    Every step you take
    Leads to it
    No were to run
    No were to hide
    It's amoung us
    We breathe it
    We live it
    We feel it
    No matter what we do
    We will always belive it
    It's part of us
    It will never leave

    Submitted on 2006-02-07 18:22:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i thought both were pretty cool, i liked the first one better. keep up the good work. the only thing that I would suggest to you, is that maybe you could fix the spelling or something like that.

    Johnny 5
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by Johnny 5 | [ Reply to This ]

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