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    dots Submission Name: Sirendots

    Author: Silent_Tears
    ASL Info:    16/f/BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 90/111/59
    Words: 263
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
    Total Views: 800
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    This is one of the poems I wrote awhile ago. The title about tells it all.

    *Let it Flow*

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    From the bottom of the flowing ocean
    I wait
    The sound of waves crashing fill the air
    The ocean turns black
    Dark as your soul
    The ocean floor begins to quake
    My tail flows gracefully towards the surface
    As the ocean becomes calm
    As I sit on the rocks jagged from years of torture
    You approach on a ship soaked in gold
    I look up place my tail in the water and wait
    Finally you're close enough
    I open my mouth to sing you a song
    Your ears have never heard such a sweet sound
    Come from a beautiful face
    The sound
    The feeling
    As the song leaves my mouth
    We wish this moment never to end
    Closer and closer you steer
    Louder and louder I sing
    I lift my tail out of the water
    Swish my golden hair
    Enticing you more and more
    Come closer
    Join me
    I seem to beckon

    Last moment I jump
    As graceful and as quick as I came
    Water ripples around the rock
    I'm no were in sight
    It's too late
    You're too close
    You hit the rocks
    The boat once soaked in gold sinks
    As you fall you wonder
    You near your watery grave
    The last thing you see will be me
    Swimming round and round
    Like a frozen teardrop
    Everlasting tortured beauty
    I speed towards the rocks to await my next ship
    You catch one last glimpse of my face
    Beauties too evil to see
    I glance down at you
    The look in your face
    A look of Solitude threaded with terror

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