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    dots Submission Name: The fox and the hound?dots
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    Author: akaietowa-ru_18
    ASL Info:    20/F/Belly of the Beast
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 101/125/64
    Words: 270
    Class/Type: Story/Comedy
    Total Views: 804
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1528



    Description:
       Heh, felt like writing something stupid for my kid cousin....The pic I finished today to go with it... I don't care if it's bad and needs work I'm laughing my butt off right now!!!!


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    dotsThe fox and the hound?dots
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    A slightly large silver fox bounded out of the brush a bit out of breath. It's golden eyes scanning the area. A silver and black dog landed right behind it.

    The dog wagged hre tail happily as she carried a brown leather leash in her mouth. The fox looked on with a panicked face and started to run at a fast pace.

    The dog seemed to pout, but she just kept her spirits up, and went after the fox.

    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~

    The fox finally stopped all it's running when it got to a large den. Well the entrance wasn't that grand, but below the ground when you entered it was huge. It was the fox's home.

    The dog blinked as she stopped infront of the entrance, but she was a bigger then the fox's small build. She whined a little with small tears in her eyes.

    The fox hearing the whining of the dog poked his head out, and pity overtook the fox for the poor dog.

    It walked slowly up to the dog and put it's small paw on the dog's head. It waited for a reaction, but would run quickly if she attempted anything sneaky.

    Waiting a few minutes still no response from the black and white dog. The fox carefully nudged her with it's long muzzle. Suddenly the fox was toppled over, and the dog was ontop of him.

    The dog seemed a bit happy with a goofy smile that some dogs contained. She put the leash around the fox, and it only took it's torture for the day.




    Submitted on 2006-02-07 21:40:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I Really liked this
    This is a great story and shows some of the human attributes animals have
    Great Job with this one
    I am a huge Huge Animal Lover
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really adorable story, thanks for sharing. I was a bit confused at the last line,

    and it only took it's torture for the day.

    but I'm old and that's my part.

    Did you ever thinking of naming the dog and the fox? Anyways, great to see that the dog got some attention!
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by Cigarz | [ Reply to This ]


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