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Hope is Torture

Author: BleedingTears
ASL Info:    16/f/Neverland
Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 418 /289 /62
Words: 89
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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okay...this new and like ive said i dont have ANY sparks at all anymore and i havent written anything in a really long time and i guess you can say its my first of 06. Im open for any comment. thanxx

Hope is Torture

You were part of the list that no one ever knew.
But being jealous is the worst part.
The tension in your arms, turned to glass---shattered.
But this is the knowledge for free
But tonight we lie awake
We can find the beauty within
We can find who we really are.
But with ribbons tied at the wrist,
And paint that cross out the eyes,
I don't believe in anything anymore.
That's why we're all brought to hope.
But hope is for believers
And hope is only torture.

Submitted on 2006-02-07 21:54:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hope is torture and torture keeps some of us alive.
it can better but i like it just the way it is.
i agree with JAcksonJr that it is a good way to end the poem...
the summing up in 2 lines.
hope i didnt offend or stuff
| Posted on 2007-04-08 00:00:00 | by rubymoon | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this piece. i felt that the begining and end were very very strong. the middle might need a little extra to keep up with the rest of the poem.

"But hope is for believers
And hope is only torture."

great way to end the poem.

J. Ackson Jr.
| Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really sad
I find it hard to believe you have let go of hope
As a matter of fact this write proves that you havent or else you would not have written this write hoping for comments to help ypu move forward
This is a good write
I look forward to more posts from you

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
| Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, great poem. Hope really is torture, and this poem just made me feel like any hope that was tried to be done was done in vain, because, do be redundant, hope is torture. This is the first writing of yours I have read, but I liked it. Keep this up.

- Cary
| Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by The Alone | [ Reply to This ]
  i really like this poem, it is full of emotion and angst. it a little bit different from some of your other stuff but its still very good. keep up the good work.
| Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by kession | [ Reply to This ]
  I think it was an excellent "angst" peom, it has everything it needed. and I will look forward to reading other poems you write I can't really say I've felt what you been through maybe I have I don't know but I give you a 10/10 xD
| Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]
  i could understand the overall message but it was quite unclear, i think. it kinda didn't go together, as faras some of the lines. it has potential but it needs work.
| Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by skinnard | [ Reply to This ]
  hmm... Strange sentiment. Hope is something everyone should have. Hope is what keeps us alive and afloat in this chaotic world of ours. Hope is... everything. Hope may be torture, but torture is ignorance, and ignorance is bliss. Good emotion and vocabulary. I love the idea, even if I don't agree with it. I've been broken many times before, but just get up, and you can help other people. People who need it. Thats what life is for. Everything happens for a reason.
Wishing for more
| Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]

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