Why do you gnaw at me so?
Like vermin caught in a trap
You chew at my mind
In your struggle to be free
I feel your fear inside of me
It echoes within the vast plains of my head
I need you...
A tug of war never held at bay
I don't know who I am today
I don't know what I need
I turn my fear upon myself
And whimper while it feeds
Impatient for a turn to lick the wounds
Impervious as it bleeds
I close my eyes against the glare
Your mirror, flashing sunlight SOS
Is Anyone out there?
Anyone here, inside?
Or am I just alone
With your image upon my mind?
| Forgive me if I giggled a little while reading this- not at your poem- but I was picturing my own little brain in my head with sprouted legs- taking over my body- me at the mercy of its whims- ha- (thats just latley though) I Dont have much time to review- so I search the archives- and I am so glad I found this one! I can relate- sometimes there are thoughts/memories that you just cannot put out of your head- then they take over! Very nicely written! no nitpickin here- Heather||| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by delusional | [ Reply to This ] || This is one heck of a deep write|
I think you were writing about that little voice in our head that is actually you that trys to bring you down
Just remember it is all human psycology
A human likes to win a battle so we create these circumstances that we can rescue ourselves
This my friend lets us win so we may move on with Life
|| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ] || Was this a poem about the nasty beast of indecision.. about a love perhaps. of just between right or wrong.. please let me know if I interpreted everything right..|
there was some nice imagery in here
"I turn my fear upon myself
And whimper while it feeds"
was the line that stuck out the most to me...
|| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Swanne | [ Reply to This ] || Wow! This piece was amazingly intense. I could feel this internal struggle while seeing such vivid external images. I love the imagery portrayed in this piece. I could feel the confusion and longing in this write. Nicely done.|
|| Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by Saint | [ Reply to This ] |