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Brain Creature

Author: Emerging Soul
ASL Info:    48/VERY female/Wisconsin
Elite Ratio:    4.36 - 1240 /1114 /244
Words: 128
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Another oldie that I dug out of my archives

Brain Creature

Oh, Creature
Why do you gnaw at me so?
Like vermin caught in a trap
You chew at my mind
In your struggle to be free
I feel your fear inside of me
It echoes within the vast plains of my head
Leave me...
I need you...
Go away...
A tug of war never held at bay
I don't know who I am today
I don't know what I need
I turn my fear upon myself
And whimper while it feeds
Impatient for a turn to lick the wounds
Impervious as it bleeds
I close my eyes against the glare
Your mirror, flashing sunlight SOS
Is Anyone out there?
Anyone there?
Anyone here, inside?
Or am I just alone
Like always
With your image upon my mind?

Submitted on 2006-02-08 11:48:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Forgive me if I giggled a little while reading this- not at your poem- but I was picturing my own little brain in my head with sprouted legs- taking over my body- me at the mercy of its whims- ha- (thats just latley though) I Dont have much time to review- so I search the archives- and I am so glad I found this one! I can relate- sometimes there are thoughts/memories that you just cannot put out of your head- then they take over! Very nicely written! no nitpickin here- Heather
| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by delusional | [ Reply to This ]
  This is one heck of a deep write
I think you were writing about that little voice in our head that is actually you that trys to bring you down
Just remember it is all human psycology
A human likes to win a battle so we create these circumstances that we can rescue ourselves
This my friend lets us win so we may move on with Life
God Bless
Your Friend
| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Was this a poem about the nasty beast of indecision.. about a love perhaps. of just between right or wrong.. please let me know if I interpreted everything right..
there was some nice imagery in here
"I turn my fear upon myself
And whimper while it feeds"
was the line that stuck out the most to me...
| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Swanne | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow! This piece was amazingly intense. I could feel this internal struggle while seeing such vivid external images. I love the imagery portrayed in this piece. I could feel the confusion and longing in this write. Nicely done.

Saitn Kairo
| Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by Saint | [ Reply to This ]

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