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Forgiveness


Author: Nynaeve
ASL Info:    23, female, Israel
Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 43 /67 /28
Words: 111
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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Forgiveness isn't something that can be achieved easily. Especially when you need forgiveness from yourself. In my opinion we judge ourselves the most, since we know what motivates us to do what we do. Just a little something to think about.


Forgiveness



I seek from heaven
The ultimate answer
The one thing
that will put my mind at ease.

I look up briefly
The moon smiling down at me
My heart is filled with warmth
I feel safe.

The night breeze whispers
Telling me tales of earth that was
The stars shine brighter
illuminating my path.

I follow the light
Taking it all in
and suddenly revealed to me
Is a waterfall scene

I take it all off
All the guilt and regrets
I bathe in the water
Letting it all wash away

I dive deeply
no more voices
no more pain
Never breaking surface
Just remaining sane.




Submitted on 2006-02-08 12:32:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  IOnteresting use of 'heaven'. I was prepped for a religious theme, but your use of literal sky was a nice touch:

I seek from heaven
The ultimate answer
The one thing
that will put my mind at ease.


groovy piece, thanks for sharin!
| Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by Cigarz | [ Reply to This ]
  this would be a good visualization for letting go of guilt, for letting go of the past. thank you. the images were beautiful and the weight is lifted by the end of the poem. nice work. (takes a woman to really appreciate it!) guys hardly ever feel guilty.
| Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
  hm, i didn't like it so much at first, but it grew on me. and then i was shocked and moved by the imagery/comparison between nudity and purity. taking it all off, leaving the past behind, being washed and cleansed...beautiful :)
| Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]


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