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    dots Submission Name: Cutting Glassdots
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    Author: disco superfly
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 15/17/4
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Feedback is greatly apperciated. I'm new here, so I'm just trying to get used to everything.


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    dotsCutting Glassdots
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    If I could fly on sunshine petals

    I surely would be blessed

    But the times I tripped and fell

    Are only half-confessed.

    Dear Eve is sobbing

    While Adam laughs and dies

    Why can't her lost children

    Hear her muffled cries?

    For as much as I want love

    I know you're surely death

    So I'll sit amoung the roses

    and choke on baby's breath.

    Onion tears by no sympathy

    Confession vents don't forgive

    I'll journey off to find the lime tree

    I'm trying to outlive.

    Silent witnesses taunting me

    Calling me the reluctant whore

    In between my scheduled silences

    Is the closing of the door.

    You don't think of your skin

    Until you feel the lash

    Tell me that this glass won't fall

    For it surely would smash.





    Submitted on 2006-02-08 16:32:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this poem although I must confess that I didn't find a whole lot of sense in it. It has a great rhyme scheme and imagery. Specially the imagery.
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by Lana | [ Reply to This ]
      very deep if you keep writing like that you will win a place in the hearts of many here I for one know that this is one for the list
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Animus Custodis | [ Reply to This ]
      I love all of your work. So beautiful and breath taking. I am so stalking you! Please never stop writting, I'll cry. This is going on my favourites too! <<3
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by atonement | [ Reply to This ]
      Confusing. I am so bewildered. I have no idea what you are talking about. Flowers, trees. It sounds like one big hippie acid trip. I liked it, but it was weird.
    LeAnna
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]


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