Hearts and Roses

Author: Linkins_knot ASL Info:    14/Male/Behind a Computer Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 20 /46 /19 Words: 106

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Hearts and Roses

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My heart It sweats of acid It no longer heals The pain Is all I gain Intriguing The spirits leave my heart Only a shell Only living an Abyss A hell All roses are black Sacred color Filled with darkness No pain No glee Just a flower The reds are hurt They bleed to their petals Filled with pain Ones they cannot control Authority rules… The White is pure Filled with love It has no problems But indeed a heart Roses are used to release lust No matter the color What do they resemble? What rose are you?

Submitted on 2006-02-08 17:38:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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hey!! this was good! u could use some puntuation work but ppl r smart they can figure it out....... ok nvm their not smart! good job! ~akaila~

| Posted on 2006-03-26 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]

Not bad. I think that punctuation is needed to read it correctly though. Example: My heart It sweats of acid. It no longer heals. The pain Is all I gain. If you read it straight through, you have to read it again to figure out where the pauses are. It's just less confusing that way. This isn't something I would normally read, but you did a good job on it.

| Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by disco superfly | [ Reply to This ]

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