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    dots Submission Name: Hearts and Rosesdots
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    Author: Linkins_knot
    ASL Info:    14/Male/Behind a Computer
    Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 20/46/19
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 178
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 747



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    dotsHearts and Rosesdots
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    My heart
    It sweats of acid
    It no longer heals
    The pain
    Is all I gain

    Intriguing
    The spirits leave my heart
    Only a shell
    Only living an Abyss
    A hell

    All roses are black
    Sacred color
    Filled with darkness
    No pain
    No glee
    Just a flower

    The reds are hurt
    They bleed to their petals
    Filled with pain
    Ones they cannot control
    Authority rules…

    The White is pure
    Filled with love
    It has no problems
    But indeed a heart

    Roses are used to release lust
    No matter the color
    What do they resemble?
    What rose are you?




    Submitted on 2006-02-08 17:38:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey!! this was good! u could use some puntuation work but ppl r smart they can figure it out....... ok nvm their not smart! good job!
    ~akaila~
    | Posted on 2006-03-26 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Not bad. I think that punctuation is needed to read it correctly though. Example:

    My heart
    It sweats of acid.
    It no longer heals.
    The pain
    Is all I gain.

    If you read it straight through, you have to read it again to figure out where the pauses are.

    It's just less confusing that way.

    This isn't something I would normally read, but you did a good job on it.
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by disco superfly | [ Reply to This ]



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