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Hearts and Roses

Author: Linkins_knot
ASL Info:    14/Male/Behind a Computer
Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 20 /46 /19
Words: 106
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Depressed
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Hearts and Roses

My heart
It sweats of acid
It no longer heals
The pain
Is all I gain

The spirits leave my heart
Only a shell
Only living an Abyss
A hell

All roses are black
Sacred color
Filled with darkness
No pain
No glee
Just a flower

The reds are hurt
They bleed to their petals
Filled with pain
Ones they cannot control
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The White is pure
Filled with love
It has no problems
But indeed a heart

Roses are used to release lust
No matter the color
What do they resemble?
What rose are you?

Submitted on 2006-02-08 17:38:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hey!! this was good! u could use some puntuation work but ppl r smart they can figure it out....... ok nvm their not smart! good job!
| Posted on 2006-03-26 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Not bad. I think that punctuation is needed to read it correctly though. Example:

My heart
It sweats of acid.
It no longer heals.
The pain
Is all I gain.

If you read it straight through, you have to read it again to figure out where the pauses are.

It's just less confusing that way.

This isn't something I would normally read, but you did a good job on it.
| Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by disco superfly | [ Reply to This ]

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