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    dots Submission Name: Everybody's whoredots
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    Author: atonement
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    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsEverybody's whoredots
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    Look at that girl, the one who was so happy before, the one we wished for the best of luck. Now look at her sleeping around for an extra buck. She use to have such dignity, such hope. Now we stare at her, selling herself to the world, because she's everybody's whore.

    Her dad is a drunk, her mom is dead. Her brother and sister have so much potential. They were so smart, they were going to go farther in life. She sold her body to the night to start a collge fund for them. She tried so hard to play mom, but it was so hard when she was everbody's whore.

    Shes beautiful, shes talented, she had it all to make in life. But still you saw her on the street corners under the streetlights, trying to make the money to support, She was everybody's whore.

    Now she dying with A.I.D.S, still she tries to be mom. She was so strong, but know she is a broken angel on the ground, a shymphony without a sound. Now she's dead, she's no longer everbody's whore.




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      This in an awsome poem my friend. The poem reminds me so much of the Sublime song wrong way. One of my favorite poems. It talks about loss and what she has to deal with and why.
    Anne's twelve years old and tommorow shell be a whore and she only wants the wrong way.
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]


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