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    dots Submission Name: By my sidedots
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    Author: DonKB
    ASL Info:    34/m/goergia
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 19/17/11
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsBy my sidedots
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    By my side
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    I watch the rising sun and think of only you ,
    Remembering the days of our youth ,
    All the places that we went ,
    And all tales that we spent ,
    On the gilded turth .
    Spent wirling and twiring around ,
    On a timely bounded plan ,
    That ungodly forgotten trace ,
    Of uneven space ,
    Which surpasses even time it self .
    I sobbed and cryed ,
    And hurt deep inside ,
    Because I had no one ,
    No one by my side .
    Then i turn to find ,
    A petal amongest bed of roses ,
    A sweet smell with in my sleep .
    A joy from way down deep ,
    To find you by my side .








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      this is beautiful, you mispelt cried. Never stop writing, you must love this person a lot. I love how you feel sad and alone then the person is right beside you.
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by atonement | [ Reply to This ]


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