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    dots Submission Name: so lonelydots

    Author: Animus Custodis
    Elite Ratio:    3.02 - 86/76/43
    Words: 256
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       just another addition to the fucked up files

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    dotsso lonelydots

    Im so close to home
    yet Im so lonely

    Why am I lost in a world of dreams
    of fantasies and the make believe

    When in truth I'm really dieing
    in the real world I'm not just crying

    So save my Soul
    and save my Life

    because today is on my mind
    and I'll try not to hide how I feel

    The gun in my hand pointed at my head
    I close my eyes and pretend I'm dead

    I walk up to Heaven and the angels said
    "theres no place for you here. try downstaris instead"

    I turn around in a flash of flame and
    asked the devil if I culd stay

    He said quietly and simply "Your free to visit anytime you like as long as you don't stay the night."

    That was good enogh for me so I open my eyes put down the gun and take off the disguise

    But now I'm lonely, just as lonely as before and if I think about it probably even more

    So I turn my room upside down looking for the only thing that can not be found

    dusty and dirty and under my bed
    I find what I'm looking for even after what you said

    I go down stairs and clean my knife,
    my only friend who hasn't deserted me in my quest for life

    Submitted on 2006-02-08 18:16:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this. When I first started to read it, I thought it wasn't going to be original, and it was going to be the usual "I'm so depressed" poem, but my thought quickly changed for the better.

    Great work, I hope to read more from you soon. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by disco superfly | [ Reply to This ]

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