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    dots Submission Name: Itís Just Another Day...dots

    Author: ladyngold
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    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsItís Just Another Day...dots

    Just another day
    like Thanksgiving and Christmas
    is Valentineís Day but
    my children gave me flowers
    and candy in a heart shaped box
    also a piece of jewelry
    a jade pendent
    from my favorite only daughter
    this did remind me
    of Valentineís Days of my past
    and I remember what you said
    lover, ďitís just another dayĒ
    precisely why you and I must part.

    Submitted on 2006-02-08 18:23:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey, I remember reading something like that from you last year too about that dork that said it was just another day...what a marooon.

    The part about the gifts the child gave was sweet and nice.

    Thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked how this wasn't just an ordinary Valentine's Day poem that focused on loving a significant other, but rather your children. [well, including that.]

    It was well written. I liked it a lot. Good job.
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by disco superfly | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice to see a post Cheryl This one left me with a sad face and I just hope that things get better for you - this is pretty matter-of-factly and you deserve a true love that treats every day like Valentines!
    Smiles and blessings!
    God Bless!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Cheryl... this is (as a poem) almost perfect. It sets it up with trivia, brings in the REAL story, and bites your bum with the ending.
    A Guard Dog of a poem.

    Be my Valentine...and

    be happy

    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      The way you connected events to shape this poem was done just right. And it carried the reader through your thought process. I think this was a very personal and sensitive topic to write about if this is true. I'm very sorry if it is. You made your pain and lost very clear for the reader and how Valentine's day was taken for granted by this man who is gone now from you. Again, I can not find a fault with your work.

    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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