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    dots Submission Name: The Ultimate Rebelliondots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Ultimate Rebelliondots

    Do suburban streets go anywhere,
    or are they all dead ends and cul-de-sacs?
    Could you see yourself living with me
    in that big brick house on the hill
    with a little you and a little me
    tugging at our clothes?
    Or do people like us
    ever feel, want or need
    that sort of happiness?
    Would we feel guilty
    for selling out if we had it?
    For artists are supposed
    to be sad , starve
    and act crazy all of the time.
    But wouldn't normalcy and joy
    be the ultimate rebellion?

    Submitted on 2004-04-30 10:06:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great write. Reminds me of how when people think of poets they always think of the goths or the people who sit all alone or have to look at the ocean for long periods of time before inpiration hits. Like we can't have friends and normal lives. This is a great poem. You did well in your word usage, and the put together of this. Great artisitic display of talent.
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by Nashataku | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it! To me it's asking after wether or not artists can ever be actually "normal". Happiness is hard to come by, but I think we of all people shoulf be a little happy because we have the best means of comunicating, therefore we should take up our place and come together in the "ultimate rebellion".
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by Phall | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting twist on things! i suppose that suburban "dream" would be the ultimate rebellion for us artistic types! and someone would surely accuse us of "selling out." i wouldn't mind a nice house in a cul-de-sac, actually. but i'd rather prefer an old log cabin with a wood-stove out in the woods near a creek! i enjoyed this little twist, though! brava!!
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I have my little house in the countryside on a dead end road cause I'm still living with my parents.
    I like your poem. it would definitely be the ultimative rebellion. maybe you just try it.
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, that would be the ultimate rebellion. I don't know if I'm rebellious enough. I'd like to be settled - but I'mnot sure if I could handle those neighborhoods with the bratty kids and the geo matros on every corner. I do get the point though - don't misunderstand me. It is good to break away (or at least have a desire to) the angsty artist porfile. ;)

    ~ Niphredil
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by Niphredil | [ Reply to This ]
      I must agree with the Ultimate Rebellion. It depends on who or what you are rebelling against, but I see the ultimaate rebellion in this piece as breaking away from being typecast. And then once you've reached that point you can rebel again, not shirking parental or spousal responsibilities, but by not being typical. This poem reminds me of a few things I've written, very loosely related. One is called In Rebellion to Ed about a co-worker who commented that I needed to shave, lol. I digress, I enjoyed the poem, the first two lines are my favorite. Can't think of anything that needs changin'
    | Posted on 2004-05-01 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      ha! this is SO cool! what a crazy concept!! the ultimate rebellion... i do believe you have a point but then... why fit the "stereotype" that the world places on artists?? i mean... you write completely outside the "square" your style is yours alone and yeah... if you dont fit into that box why try fit into another?? anyways i hope what i just said sounded positive and like a compliment coz it reals was meant that way! im gonna be quiet now but i reals loved this!
    | Posted on 2004-05-01 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This earns you the dubious honour of eccentricity. Tugging at our clothes??, where did you get that from?, a vivid image and well liked. Sadly (happily?) though, more and more artists are living pretty normal lives so, NO, normalcy has become the norm...if that makes any sense. Oh, forget it, I'm making about as much sense as this poem and it is more deserving than my comment anyway.
    | Posted on 2004-05-03 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]

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