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    dots Submission Name: Wating to Diedots

    Author: DrkRomeo_sGirl
    ASL Info:    16/f/somewhere in my mind
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 77/75/26
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Political
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       NO THIS IS NOT A SUICIDE NOTE. Its just my way of a figure a speech about the us and the world. PLEASE, after you read this comment me on my other poems. I need more feedback so i can improve. Thanks.

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    dotsWating to Diedots

    I write to feel,
    I feel to write.
    Blade to my wrist,
    With a messed up knife.

    I live to Die,
    I die to Live.
    Just to feel the pain,
    I have everything to give.

    You think im crazy,
    That may be true.
    Theres nothing I haven't tried,
    Or anything I won't do.

    The world is messed up,
    In and out.
    Bush can give that a real
    Big Shout.

    Political Rages,
    Pop star stages.
    Its all the same,
    A crying shame.

    Thats why I hve a blade
    To my wrist,
    With a clinch in my fist.

    Saying Goodbye!
    Never having to hear
    Another lie.

    Alll I want to do
    Is Die.
    So I turn on the news
    To hear one more lie,
    Watching the blood flow,

    Submitted on 2006-02-08 18:28:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      been there , done that.

    if i wrote this poem i would be all like HELL YEAH
    but i didn't
    you did
    babe, if you need ANYTHING
    you know where to go.
    call me if you ever feel remotely close to this.
    i'll be there beside you in a heartbeat
    i love you very much shorte
    you know i would do anything for you

    enough with the "mushy stuff"
    cool poem im not gonna say keep it up b/c it worries me
    but i still like it.
    | Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by XmaryjaneX | [ Reply to This ]
      hey hey , this is a v v v v very good piece

    espically about Bush as lets face it, the guy is an idiot, a freak and so in Blair for being his lap dog

    well done :)
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by Robert Neville | [ Reply to This ]
      I understand how you feel, I agree bush is an idiot. The flow and wording in this poem are both great, I also love the structure of this. The only thing I can really say, since you cannot critique one's mind, is to spellcheck, and watch wor typos. Other then that good job!
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Dark Muse | [ Reply to This ]
      Intense piece. Are you talking about the state of the world being suicidal? Are you expressing yourself as being "fed up"? The flow is nice.
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Sunray | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting concept for a speach. But there is an extreamly nice flow throughout the whole poem. I liked it. So what is the speach about?
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]

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