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    dots Submission Name: peopledots
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    Author: luvy
    ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270/168/35
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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       yeah i was just thinking you know cause i overheard somone say that the poor only get poorer but the rich get richer. so i thought about and i thought about who have of those people used to be before they became rich.


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    Humans

    Were all just a bunch of hypacrits

    We aspire to be the things we hate

    Take the poor

    They complain and talk about how much they hate the rich

    They talk about how lazy they are and how they dont ever ahve to work for anything

    But then you see them faithfully playing the lottery every wednesday adn saturday night

    they spend money to play a game of chance to become that which their suppose to hate and envy

    Those that lose become bitter and complain more

    Those that win become estatic because they finaly get to become a part of the world that they supposedly hate

    The once sweet and nice become cold and hardend by money

    Then they start to look down on what they themselves used to be

    Im not gonna lie i envy the rich sometimes because they have more money than me

    But if i ever become rich i wont forget who i used to be




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      hey gena! dude ur freakin supposed to tell me when u post? u didnt say anything about it! maybe i should start thinkin outside da box! haah! thats funny! anyway this waz good! ya i hate some rich ppl*cough* PARIS HILTON! that [censored]! anyway good joB!
    ~akaila~
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a pretty good look into today's society. it seems like i've rubbed off on you. ur starting to think outside of the box. i liked the last couple of lines the most. a lot of rappers, famous people, etc usually go back to their hoods and try to better the situations there. but some people just disgard those who are exactly the way they used to be. hypocrites...i think that's how u spell it
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      The human race as a whole has failed. But it is the people that exceed expectations that really matter...
    I found this very dark...but remember that one person can make a difference. that is the reason why I write
    .. also some minor spelling errors...
    hypocrites...
    rember we can not better other people if we do not work on ourselves
    thought provoking...if nothing else
    Swanne...
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Swanne | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok yes there are some poor people who are like that, unfortunatly greed is just a part of humanity but me personaly, i'd HATE it to become rich i've always like the idea of living free, on the road, roaming the contry. Like if i grow up and end up siting at a computer all day wearing some good forsaken semi foraml suit i know i've failed in life but if i get to just go wear ever in life... maybe with a true love, then i have succeeded in living my life... of coarse im just a stupid 15 year old who do know nothing lol i mean i dont mean to put you down the sytle and way you put words was cool but becareful when you label it as ALL people or EVERYONE because no two people are completly alike unless their siamees twins...
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by Breed of Wind | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, it has such a true meaning,

    one correction it is hypocrits not hypacrits

    I like the way youhave done this, it is true that the rich get richer and the poor get poorer but the rich had to work for their money and they worked hard, i think they deserve it if they worked hard to get where they are to not have to work for it anymore if that makes sense.

    Anyway I still liked it. Good job

    Tink
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]


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