Oh, my girlfriend lives in Texas
She left the other day
And I live here in Michigan
And that's a long, long way
Oh, she can't stay here with me
So she left me here alone
So I talk to her on the internet
And on the telephone
Oh, she's coming back to see me
And I'm glad of that of course
But she doesn't drive a car yet
So she'll have to ride a horse
And that horse that she'll be riding
Is old and broken down
It'll probably be some time next year
When she rides into town
Oh, I told her that I loved her
And she told me the same
But we live very far apart
And no one is to blame
Oh, we can't stay in two places
So we'll have to choose just one
Should we fry down there in Texas
Or freeze in Michigan?
| Tell your dad he gave me a smile on an otherwise ugly Monday morning. Light fun stuff like this is a necessary part of life!!|
|| Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ] || My sister moved from Michigan to Texas - don't think she lasted a year before moving back. The part of Texas they lived in was all brown fields and blue sky. Not even a cloud - just dead grass, blue sky and the sun.|
I'll take shoveling three feet of snow any day!
Regarding the lyrics at hand, S4L4 may read smoother with "my town".
|| Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by FrankBlissett | [ Reply to This ] || I liked this. It is very funny …. made me laugh. I'm not really sure what kind of feedback you are looking for but so I’m not going to point out much in terms of critiques, thought there isn’t much to say on that account since it seems to be a very good piece, in my view. |
However, I noticed that lines 13 - 14 - 15 - 16 sound rather strained and that diction there wasn't really effective. The rest is fine... the message that was being conveyed is quite straightforward and very enjoyable indeed. The whole thing reminded me of what I'm currently going through for the person that stole my heart is currently in another country and dunno ... it's just hard to breathe when that one person who complements you so completely is not physically with you.
One line that got struck in my head was "And no one is to blame" it made think that in my case is just the reverse ... and guess who blames who??? LOL
The ending is simply hilarious and very well achieved ...I guess that it couldn't have been better ...
Well ... that's about it.
|| Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ] || freeze in Michigan. definately. i personally hate the cold, but i've been told that the people in texas are just outright scary. other than that it's got a flawless meter and and gentle humor. tell him it's nice.||| Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ] || Haha. I love your dad, he's hilarious. And he finally gave my CDs back! lol.|
Anyhow, since this is your dad's piece, it would be silly to give you advice on this one. But I can totally relate because I know the whole situation, and I had a long distancey thing with a girl in Texas. I can't remember what the age difference between Devin and Jody was, but mine was kinda egh... she's fourteen, and I'm really glad that I got out of that.
Still can't believe Jody's getting married. That's freaking crazy.
I agree with ruejacobs on the Texas thing though. They are really different down there. Of course, Texas is a sovereign republic. We count them as a state, but they have their own ways that you will not see anywhere else in the United States. And better Mexican food than they have in Mexico.
Strange, but true.
Haha. Love ya Carrie. Can't wait until we get to hang out at Statewide together!
|| Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by Zabriel | [ Reply to This ] || Amusing! I really enjoyed the humor and rhythm of this piece. Just shows that some good poetry need not be too deep to be appreciated. :)||| Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by Vangielyn | [ Reply to This ] |