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    dots Submission Name: Painful Sobsdots
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    Author: kissingadict
    ASL Info:    18//F//CT
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 110/136/32
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsPainful Sobsdots
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    She could feel it in her bones.
    It had never hurt this much,
    But couldn’t put her finger on it.
    Two bodies so in tune,
    She was tormented, and felt the pain,
    Before as much as a sound
    Escaped from his sweet mouth.

    The silence was heart-wrenchingly deafening.
    Warm tears streaming down her face,
    Silent screams and repentant sobs
    Tore her core apart, and left her shamefully naked.

    She was desperate to fall back asleep,
    And wake up to the realization that this nightmare
    Was merely a frightful dream.




    Submitted on 2006-02-08 19:45:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, this was great, to me it spoke of heartbreak or someone dying maybe im wrong but thats what it said to me.

    She was tormented, and felt the pain,
    Before as much as a sound
    Escaped from his sweet mouth.

    this is my favourite part.

    Keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]


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