My heart
It sweats of acid
It no longer heals
The pain
Is all I gain
Time does not heal all wounds
Not even mine
It only cuts deeper as the time passes
Like a grudge you cannot relieve
Intriguing
The spirits leave my heart
Only a shell
Only living an Abyss
A hell
Corrupted
Toxicated
Injection with no relief
Injection of fears and pain
Possible cure
It cannot be love
Love tatters and tears
Rips you apart
As if you did not have a heart
But this is a price to pay
If you want experience
Love creates Lust and pain
A great experience that may be in vane
May rule authority to control you
Lose control
Its terrorizes from the inside out
All you can do is cry and shout…
hey u!! this is good! i like the word toxicated! so it should be a word! i say it all da time!! good job! its another fav! my favorite stanza was this one! "My heart It sweats of acid It no longer heals The pain Is all I gain"
i dont know what 2 say but i liked it specially this part: Time does not heal all wounds Not even mine It only cuts deeper as the time passes Like a grudge you cannot relieve
This was very interesting to read because the rhythm and feall keep changing and twists the feel of the write. The 4th Strophe needs some work though. Toxicated is NOT a word..so try this.
Corrupted Toxification Rejection with no relief Injection of fears and pain Possible cure
Submission Name: "Heart"
