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    dots Submission Name: Sleep and Sexdots
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    Author: redthewitch
    ASL Info:    36/f/tiny rural village
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 267/175/26
    Words: 21
    Class/Type: Misc/Passion
    Total Views: 1037
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    Description:
       This is a work in progress. I am currently working on a series of poems with first lines from the poetry of Jim Morrison. I am using this as an exercise to overcome my writer's block. Hopefully something worthwhile comes of this.


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    dotsSleep and Sexdots
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    In this full-throated
    haze of love
    heavy-lidded
    Lingering
    darkest hour
    between sleep and desire
    Slow churning ecstasy
    a lullabye in rapture




    Submitted on 2004-04-30 10:35:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lots of passion in few lines...reminds me of a first night with someone...between the passion there is little sleep...we just want to play and pay attention to our significant other...absorb each other...the tiredness is euphoric in a sense...

    you are quite good at painting pictures with your words...and also saying a lot with what you don't say.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-04-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      After the after glow and after you wake up
    druged by the night before, Oh lord I hope I'm off the next day. What can I say, You have a way pulling people into a poem.
    I see a book in your future.
    make it happen.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      I suppose it all really depends what time you have to get up for work the next day...

    One has to love Jim Morrison and the Doors. They were one of the most original acts back in the day. I can't believe they're actually touring without jim though. He WAS the band...him with his crooning and nice clothes....
    ~Aaron
    | Posted on 2004-05-16 00:00:00 | by MusingMinstrel | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really nice. It sounds so pretty the way you say it. You misspelled lullaby though.
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      This was nice. It sounded wonderful reading it aloud. It flowed nicely too....
    ~Jaime Lee Pachétte~
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]
      mmmmmmmm...just wanted to crawl back in bed and cuddle and indulge...nice read!
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]


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