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I dunno


Author: Razing_Fire
ASL Info:    16/M/Spokane
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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I dunno why I'm writing this. Perhaps to shake off the feeling that I have block? Anyways this was made up on the moment so I Dunno what it is gonna be about except not knowing. So ya.. hope ya like it. This is more of a song by the way...

This actually has nothing to do with how I feel so.. no being worried anyone. It's kinda deppressing and I hope to determine what I will use a bridges and the chorus if I re-write it.


I dunno



I dunno
what to do before me
I dunno
what there is left for me

I dunno
why is there nothing forward
I dunno
why I feel free

Cause I am trapped
Within my own walls
There is nothin here
That comes to my calls

Cause I'm left alone
I'll be by myself
And I'll never ever
Be myself again

Cut off from the world
Living in shelter
Lost in your innocence
Locked far away

Never to come out
Never to listen
Never to falter
Always to be put away
(Go to Start if read as song)




Submitted on 2006-02-08 23:48:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Gee... I wonder who you're talking about... anyway.

Hi Rice, Nice write and everything... just here commenting on a few people before I go to sleep... so yeah, Good write, Nice flow, try using a little punctuation and the such, make it... well... I don't know... whatever, it's good...

- Kyle
| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this, it captures depression as it really is. Everyone when they feel this feels like there is no escape no one to help and that they will always have no one but anyone who has gottenthrough depression knows that this is not the case.

Anyway Ilike this, its really good. Well done

Tink
| Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]
  i like everything bout this but the first 2 paragraphs but anyway its really good.
-sarah
and ur not alone u have the evil bunnies lol!
| Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by Brat05 | [ Reply to This ]


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