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    dots Submission Name: Virtual Valentinedots
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    Author: Sacred Sindy
    ASL Info:    30 female in Portland, Or
    Elite Ratio:    6.36 - 151/128/34
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1326
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    dotsVirtual Valentinedots
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    An Instant Message Conversation:

    girl777: to me there is no such thing as flaw
    girl777: i would love every flaw... and my love would make it perfect
    boy4u: that’s the most beautiful thing i've heard tonight
    girl777: really? well its true
    boy4u: and I u
    girl777: love makes all things beautiful
    boy4u: it does, when applied
    girl777: and i would apply it all over you
    girl777: all over your heart…
    girl777: your soul…
    girl777: your body…all my love
    girl777: over and over again
    girl777: infinitely
    boy4u: you are touching tonight
    girl777: sorry... i’ve been reading poetry again
    boy4u: you're there in the place of grace
    girl777: you bring me there…and grace has got a nice place
    girl777: …real clean
    boy4u: yep




    Submitted on 2006-02-09 03:29:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is so unique to see here.. virtual communication is a strange thing, cyberspace being such a different way of meeting people and "chatting." we can hide behind a screen and be who we want, or we can be ourselves, bold and bright and see what beauty we can find.. and grace.. i like how you use that word here. this seems so pure.. but i suppose the reality may be different were you to meet? ah, interesting questions.

    i enjoyed this for its uniqeness..a snapshot of two people communicating behind a screen..

    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to say this is probably one of the more original pieces that I've read in a long time. I'm not big on love stuff myself, it usually winds up sounding sappy, but then again I've always been pessimistic, haha. I like you're honesty here, though. When it comes to love, perfection isn't what a person should be looking for, but the so-called "flaws", or imperfections. For me, I'd prefer someone with crazy little quirks and idiosyncracies, maybe small scar on her face or a strange birth mark on her body, something that makes her unique, one of a kind, imperfect yet completely adorable.
    I love the abrupt, kind of awkward ending, where it says "...real clean." And the boy responds, "Yep." It brought a bit of a smile to my face.
    As far as criticisms go, since its a piece in the form of an instant message, I can't really point out any errors in grammar or spelling, I mean, come on now, we've all read e-mails and had IM conversations, and the people we talk to (and even us, at times, no one is perfect) are hardly the most grammatically endowed people on the planet.
    Keep it up,
    HWKI
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by HWKI | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooooh this is so INCREDIBLE...Its amazing how love can shape our perceptions only to purify and cleanse our souls..This was such an INTIMATE but simple conversation that just about any one could have..However, the beauty of this piece lies in the wonderful revealations that are unveiled to these two souls...I was so touched...See Im about to cry now...BE HAPPPPPY...Nobantu
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Nobantu | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting piece. It seems like you're expressing yourself to be Love itself. Very mystical and enchanting. Perhaps if you commented on this piece being a "chat" session for those of us less cyber friendly, that may open up the appeal. But still lovely.. :)
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Sunray | [ Reply to This ]


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