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    dots Submission Name: Colorblinddots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I have no idea what this is about. It just poured out of me in about 30 seconds the other morning at work. If you know what it's about, let me know. I don't even really remember much about writing it...

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    Do you dream in black and white,
    Or is there a thin, red line between
    The things you thought you wanted
    And the colors that you've seen.

    Do you think in shades of gray?
    Is your heart entirely black?
    You see the things you've thrown away
    And still you wonder what you lack.

    Do you bleed in rivers of blue?
    You cultivate your silver tongue.
    One wonders how you cause this damage
    When you're still so very young.

    Do you dream in black and white,
    Or is there color to be seen?
    Is there a pot at the end of this rainbow
    Filled with broken dreams?

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      Except for line 4 in V-3 which felt a little ...forced... I thought that was a great use of metaphor of color.

    It comes across as someone writing of a lover who has left her , or caused great distress in some way.

    You have a way with words.
    Well done indeed.


    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Psyve | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that this is all about perception :P
    Ha ha get it? But seriously, maybe the colors themselves represent moods...I don't dream in black and white, my dreams are very colorful...sometimes they're gray. But I sense that this is more than the literal meaning...I think I would have to read it again to really come up with a theory. But my time is so very precious and I have to comment on other people to you selfish meanie *insert mean face here*

    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      this was great i love how you speak of being colorblind and thinking in shades of gray...it reminds me of ppl who can't or don't want to see the light...it was a very well-written piece
    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by poetry chica | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh wow, this is another great poem. I liked it a lot I think the second and fourth stanzas were my favorite. They had a wonderful rhyme and, therefore, flowed really well. I am thinking i have to agree with Jaz. Mabey about perception. But, really, it seems like all of the stanzas could be about something different.

    First Stanza: Someone who got everything they have always thought that they've ever wanted and they still find themselvs still longing something else, something in red. Perhaps excitement, an affiar, heat, compassion, mabey a person in a red dress or with red hair.

    Second Stanza:Mabey someone that is very caught up in being sad. 'Emo' or something sterotypical, 'I am gothic and sad, feel sorry for me.' And they have given all of the nessecary things to fit into this personality and still they wonder why they are not happy and why they do not fill fullfilled as they had hoped to by becomeing this sterotype.

    Third Stanza:Mabey a terribly sad teenager that has told many lies and hurt many people (Silver toung) by doing so. And they bleed, hmmm...what does blue personify, sadness, or something. After I look it up it seems that blue is generaly percived as a symbol for stregnth or stability, so mabey this person is seemingly happy and strong, but when she is alone she is scared weak and she is afraid to not be strong.

    Fourth Stanza:Mabey personifying the someone's view of the world. A black and white world would be boring and without a future. But they think that mabey there could be color some where, perhaps a better oppertunity. And tthe last two lines are speculation, will exploring this 'new world' be fufilling and leave me happy, or will, when I get to the end, will there be nothign but broken dreams, broken hopes.
    I like this poem a lot, dear Raivn. Very good job.
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]

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