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    dots Submission Name: my tearsdots

    Author: EV2884
    ASL Info:    21years/female/michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.88 - 53/48/15
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       well i wrote this for my grandpa he died last may but nobody but a few family members were with him so my grandma is coming up and i was wondering if this a good poem or not because i would like to read this for his funeral here in michigan.

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    dotsmy tearsdots

    my tears roll down
    my face as i mourn
    a loved one.as he
    passes through the light
    and into the afterlife
    but my tears will stop
    and i know death is
    just the beginning
    for a bright new day
    we will all remember
    him and through our rememberence
    he will live on and be with us
    grandpa we all love you and miss
    you for now i will shed
    my tears.

    Submitted on 2006-02-09 11:40:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm really sorry, for you anguish and loss. I lost my Great Aunt a month ago, I know how you feel. Her and I were close. This is a very beautiful write and it is really hard to find words to describe emotions. I hope you keep writing. I truly am sorry.
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm sorry first of all for your loss, I actually just lost my grandmother a few days ago...and the poetry helps I'm sure. I think that this was written with emotion and therefor I am not going to comment...real emotions are beautiful and I could never do them justice with words. The best of luck to you.
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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