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Like A Kite


Author: vedanta19
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Like A Kite



Soaring high, far away in the solemn sky,
Breathing the breeze of freedom -
a life - unrealized, uncaptured;

I dream of a world in neverland,
Where angels float on cottony clouds,
Where sadness remain quiet - unheard,
Where little fairies dance to the delicate music of rain,
A painless loving - no heartaches;

In peach-coloured air of selfless human hugs,
Simplicity like a prayer - pure, unrecalled,
Rest on dew kissed grass;

..like a kite,
free, colourful and joyful

I dream of a world of neverland.




Submitted on 2006-02-09 13:05:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  dream of a world in neverland,
Where angels float on cottony clouds,
Where sadness remain quiet - unheard,
Where little fairies dance to the delicate music of rain,
A painless loving - no heartaches;



..............if only it existed. I love this. And I dream of this world every night and day....I long for it. ah...if only....
| Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
  The imagary you used made me re-read this a few times so I could soak it all in. As others who have commented - I have my own thoughts on where each movement led me to in my mind; and they were really nice places. I really enjoy how you did that for me.
I did have a little trouble with the "neverland" bit of the poem at first. You did not quite spell out what or where neverland is at. So I stopped dwelling and just let what you had already put in my mind and made a place of my own for your "neverland."
Finally, I love where you take your inspiration from. I can see you sitting somewhere, look up and see a kite floating and dancing, and just start relating to it on the level that you do.
I loved this one! Cheers!
| Posted on 2006-03-19 00:00:00 | by Isaac | [ Reply to This ]
  This is absolutely beautiful
I loved the visions this write created
I thought of the kite as abird flying freely with nature
I loved this
This one is a favorite
God Bless
Ron

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  This has a wonderful lightness - a sort of let us drift away with the kite. You have an extra 't' in little, also I think I would split this line and add a 'the' as follows.

Where litttle fairies dance
to the delicate music of rain

Additionally, I think I would seperate 'dewkissed.'

My favourite line is

'Where sadness remain quiet - unheard',
that's nice
love and peace
Comradenessie
| Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by comradenessie | [ Reply to This ]
  Sounds like this neverland is heaven, except without the fairies. Really light-hearted and wonderful. That was a good write, and very original. Great! God Loves You!
| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]
  I loved the words, the feeling of a breeze, everything about this made me want to get better. Although this didn't ryhme it didn't bother me the least bit. I loved it, and there is nothing that I can say bad about this. Personally I think that the best part was when you said "Rest on dewkissed grass" Great Write!
Alyssa
| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
  peach-colored air reminds me of a painting and I think it would be just splendid to live in a painting, reminded me of maybe micheal angelo...with angels and lovely things. very good valentinesy feeling poem.
| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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