That is what I felt like, until not to long ago. I mean I still find myslef sleep walking through life sometimes wishing and wanting, but slowly I start to pick the pieces back up. I think I am finding my truth once again. As for the poem I can tell this come from a heart with stiches. There was lots of emotion in this poem. Wishes and hopes now are destroyed, that is what you wrote, very sly and good. I am impressed by your talent Ms. delight. I think if you go professional you can be a real star.
Soul mates? Yeah right. When and Where does anyone ever find that anymore? I believe in true love, I just find that it's usually unreciprocated. One person loves, hard, as the other one looks the other way.
I like the way that you're poetry is easily read. I think the ryhming keeps it that way. Don't get me wrong, I'm not trying to downplay it or accuse it of lack of sophistication, because that would not be true.
Nietchze hated poets. He said that they built mendacious word bridges. This is straight as an arrow, and I do like it.
I especially like the first stanza, and the way that the loss of routine widens the gap in the heart. (did that just make sense?) Anyway, I'm gonna continue reading. I have been in love with a girl for 13 years. No matter how hard I try, I can't make it go away. I'm convinced that if she were mine, I'd no longer have a need for poetry. That's why I hate poetry so much. It bleeds in me. Hot. That's why I relate to your poetry. The longing, and the angst side of it. Take care, Toby
i really like this piece. 1.) the title is AMAZING. i was once taught without a great title your writing would not be complete. it should be something powerful, something that grabs the reader and makes them WANT to read deeper into this already awsomely titled piece. and i think youve done a great job with that. 2.) it touches on something most definitely everyone has experience or WILL experience at some point in their life. therefore, you've written something the reader can definitely relate to on a personal level. everyone knows what its like to not want to get out of bed in the morning because of this thing or that. everyong has dwelled on their past at some time...this creates a relationship between the reader and the piece they are reading. and you have done a great job with that also.
Yeah, can definitely relate to this, for so many reasons... Questioning fate, wondering why your life turned out the way it did, it's enough to drive one crazy. I swear that's what it's doing to me. I for one choose to believe that there are brighter days ahead. For you, for me, for all of us. Beautiful job sis, definitely a favorite. ...bb...
While reading this... I let a tear go... seems like I am going through the same situation right now... trying to go back and see if I can do something different to change and still have the one I love... it is so hard... I wake up think about her... I go to class still think about her but a little less... I go home and there is where it really hits me up... I love the title choice for it and I love the hit after hit after hit style of writing you used... give them the info and then make one strong point... this is really really good writing you have here... keep it up
I felt myself relating a lot to this piece because of my personal experience with clinical depression...mine was not caused by a love-gone-wrong or heartbreak, but the description of how everything becomes a chore and it is difficult to even get up out of bed let alone MAKE the bed rings home, as does the living as though in a trance and feeling empty and void of soul...
Sad stuff here EGB. Fate or choice? Usually its simpler to believe in that fate stuff than to actually face the fact that accountability for ones actions sometimes lead to this loneliness stuff aint it?
This had a brisk, sweeping structure to it that set the pace and held the readers interest.
I can truly relate to this feeling. You expressed the pain and mourning over lost love so well, it was like you took a page out of my old diaries. this had the feel of life coming to a stand still because everything changed and was unexpected. It was very moving and tear jerking to read. Great write. A sure fav of mine.
Very beautiful write and so sad and lonely. I could feel the ppain myself! Sometimes it helps to just get it all out I guess... I think this is to the point and I have no suggestions of change, seems fine just the way it is. !doc'
It beautiful. My friend is going through this right now, she doesnt get up, she dosent eat, she doesnt sleep, shes a reck. This kinda puts her problems into perspective for me. thanks for the help ~*Trudeath
oh, this aches me right in the heart.. having been in this place, and not too very long ago, it hits home. i'll tell ya, though, it does get easier and the sun does shine again.. i like your title as well. we think something is going to last forever, but how realistic is that, really? it's sad. as for understanding "fate's hand," i don't know that we ever can. there are lessons to be learned, i think, with every relationship, if we are open enough to learn them. i wish you peace in your soul and love anew in your heart.
This is a very good and well written write You expressed yourself perfectly in this one Please just remember You are never alone There is always someone there to help you when you are down And when there is no one in sight Just look to your Heart and there you will find the Lord waiting to help You God Bless Your Friend Ron
Yeah, great title. I loved it. It was short and nice. Powerfull yet simple, everything I like in poems. Good job, and great write. I dont really relate to it much, but thats only because I have never felt this emotions, but you describe having them very well... Perfect!
this is beautiful! i haven't been around much reading anything and i'm glad to find this as one of the first i have! you still are an amazing writer. not much else to say, this is a wonderful piece and i adore it!
I waz just read'n your poem here and I agree with everything you said or atleast should I say I understand everything you said. The only thing I want to point out is if you have good, true, friends then your never really alone. But it sure can seem and feel like sometimes. And true friends are very hard to find. You were very direct with your thoughts when writing this and I can appreciate when someone is direct and truthful. That alone to me makes it a good write. So, there you have my opinion for what it's worth... !doc'