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    dots Submission Name: Goodbye?dots

    Author: samyalone
    ASL Info:    17/f/my room
    Elite Ratio:    3.85 - 93/67/18
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       This is just something I wrote, it came from my heart and I know that it's not as greatas my usuals. sorry about that

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    How do you expect
    A person like me to let go,
    To learn to say goodbye
    To all the people I know?

    All I ever really wanted
    Was to stay here with you all,
    But now it's time for me to fly
    I try to stop tears that fall.

    Last person I said goodbye to
    Is no longer by my side~
    After she left my loving heart
    I was lost in memories that died.

    The memories still haunt me
    When I saw my mother die
    So how can you expect me
    To learn to say goodbye?

    Submitted on 2006-02-09 21:12:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Strong feelings coming from the heart, it is best to write when it comes from an experience you have felt. So much pain and suffering is ouch to the heart and soul... so you cant be expected to say goodbye... you know she is still there with you in your thoughts, your dreams, and your heart you know you can still count on her. Good writing nice rhythim and very emotional stuff.

    Jose J. Ortiz aka Josyman
    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree with the above user...I mean poems are best when theyre written out of actual experiences... and this is an amazing experiecne i lost my mother to and ive changed for better or worse im not sure but i have. and this poem really shows how youre struggling to survive...amazing keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Jingles | [ Reply to This ]
      the best poems are the ones that come from actual feelings , and are best when the piece is written while those feelings are still strong. I havent read any of your other pieces i dont think but i really enjoyed this.good work
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by skinnard | [ Reply to This ]

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