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Roses of december


Author: Jingles
ASL Info:    19.m.canada
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Its kind of long but...its a song not a poem. tell me what you think...be brutally honest.


Roses of december



My flesh this,blade it yearns,
Your love stings,Your love burns,
These wounds wont cauterize,
I choke on frozen pride,
Your words sink,sink like lead,
I hope youre,Fucking dead,
Your love it sears and rips,
Taste regret In youre lips,

Lips of satin,whisper deciet,
As I confront,this darkened reality,
You said you'd be there,don't you remember?
Now I wither in these roses of december.

Blinded by,all these lies,
shattered heart,lifeless eyes,
In these shadows I'm lost,
I'm living at such a great cost,
weakend by,emotion,
chained up through limitations,
satin pools,of sorrow,
I pray for no tomorrow,

Lips of satin,whisper deciet,
As I confront, this darkened reality,
You said you'd be there don't you remeber?
Now I wither in these roses of december.

Roses of,December,
Why can't you, remember?
I told you,I loved you,
Why can't you remember?
Roses of december,
Why can't you remember?
I told you,I loved you,
Why can't you,remember?

Lips of satin whisper deciet,
As I confront,this darkend reality,
You said you'd be there ,don't you remember?
Now I wither in these roses of december.

Roses of december,
Why can't you,remember?
I told you,I loved you,
Why can't you,remember?
Roses of,Decemeber,
Why can't you remember?

Lips of satin whisper deciet,
As I confront,this darkened reality,
You said you'd be there,don't you remember?
Now I wither in these roses of decemeber.




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