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    dots Submission Name: drop your gunsdots
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    Author: young p
    ASL Info:    14/m/N.O.La
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 29/31/11
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 662
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 535



    Description:
       short rap about violence


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    dotsdrop your gunsdots
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    Some people think they’re cool cause they got a gun
    Then upgrade themselves to G’s cause the damage that they’ve done
    But it doesn’t take much to put your finger to the trigger and pull it
    Sending a bullet through anybody’s mullet
    Making sure the on-lookers understood it
    It isn’t right
    Maybe you should think twice
    Follow in the footsteps of Christ
    Or look to the light before you take flight like a kite
    And jump into a gunfight that’s planned for tomorrow night




    Submitted on 2006-02-10 09:11:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yes, yes, write more *shakes head like a hyperactive freak* lol, anyway. This was pretty cool. Short, simple, but I, too, liked where you were headed to it. One of the few raps that I've read and/or heard that stressed how UNcool it was to be shooting guns at people. I own a gun, and I shoot it, but I took a gun saftey exam and they could track me down if I did anything wrong with it, lol. I hunt, lol, just to let you vegetarians know that, lmao. Anyway, cool write.
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      ok this was short but kinda kool,
    love where you were going with it,
    maybe you could write more, liked the expresions made,
    thanx for sharing
    x x x x
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]


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