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    dots Submission Name: TRULY THE GRIMMEST GRIM REAPERdots
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    Author: disturbedx1000
    ASL Info:    28/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 204/326/124
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 1306
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1189



    Description:
       this is my 3rd piece to my series of DEATH poems. this one shows how death can never be completly murciful and that it can happen to anybody at any age.


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    dotsTRULY THE GRIMMEST GRIM REAPERdots
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    With a sickle and touch,
    He causes so much,
    Suffering and pain,
    There lives to gain,

    Each one killing him,
    They bow to his whim,
    He touches an innocent,
    The soul repents,

    This one so pure,
    Death could not cure,
    She lives to live,
    No life to give,

    He ponders a while,
    With a bony smile,
    A tear from an empty face,
    His touch such a disgrace,

    Only to bring pain to others,
    All except this another,
    So free and true,
    He speaks “I can not touch you”

    “But it is your time miss”,
    “I’m sorry one of bliss”
    With the sickle at hand,
    He checks his hour glass of sand,

    The last grain falls,
    The afterlife calls,
    With one foul swoop,
    Blood and tears droop,

    For he could not touch her,
    To young; he was so sure,
    That he didn’t have the heart,
    To take her soul and depart,

    With this late demise,
    Come tears of surprise,
    He is the grimmest grim reaper,
    In the afterlife he shall seek her…




    Submitted on 2006-02-10 10:27:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the lines on this poem they are very dark and stylish, the flow was a tad bit off. its true though, death comes for people at any age, and noone is impervious. I Really enjoyed it, make more please
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Auron119 | [ Reply to This ]
      What?!?! No comments? These people on here scare me...they need help...or maybe we need help...lol. anyway. This was so sad...I wonder why of all the people he's killed that he couldn't kill her, hmmm, that could be something to work with in your future sequels to this poem. good one, I enjoyed it a lot.
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a [censored] good poem, i really liked it. There were some parts were the wording was a little funny and the flow was off, but you made it so good and dark and deep that i dont really care. Its really hard to pick my favorite lines, but i really liked all the lines starting wit

    “But it is your time miss”,

    From that line all the way to the very end its just extremely emotional and gave me this feeling in the stomach. I really felt the sadness of the grim reaper, the pain and the regret. You did a really good job bringing out the emotions in this piece. very very good. This is hell of one of my favs now, good job.
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by Faith_Disease | [ Reply to This ]


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