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    dots Submission Name: Goodbyedots

    Author: prettybaby
    Elite Ratio:    6.59 - 191/194/59
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    gleaming sun
    seeps through the window
    my mind pools
    near my mouth

    swimming thoughts
    can find no outlet
    my reflections
    fill with doubt

    aching brain
    the flow is ending
    words refuse
    to be revealed

    broken heart
    needs no mending
    for already
    it has healed

    Submitted on 2006-02-10 11:46:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      We all get a case of writier's block from time to time. Don't let it bother you. I agree with Steve. It will come back when you see or hear something that inspires you. Don't try to force it , it will come on it's own. You do have talent, don't throw it away. just take a break, try painting a picture instead. It's very relaxing and creative too. I'll be looking for more of your writing later.
    Ms. Gifted
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Ms. Gifted | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting piece. There are a lot of pieces about writer's block out there, but this one explores your motivations much better than most.

    I think the key is near the middle:
    broken heart
    needs no mending
    for already
    it has healed

    The source of your poetry was your broken heart and now that you've moved on, where do the words come from?

    When I first started writing poetry it was all about my mother's death. It helped me work through that a lot. After a while, I reached a sort of plateau, I guess, where I just wasn't ready to explore any more feelings related to that. By that time, I was on Elite Skills and I felt like I somehow needed to keep writing. After a while, I wrote a piece about a dear friend and her somewhat unorthodox career choice.

    In the end, I discovered that for me, I write to express feelings that I already have. I can't create feelings on demand when I feel that I should write something. I've finally defeated writer's block, by just not writing when I don't want to. I seem to be like a warm spring, that every now and then gets hot enough to bubble over with a few words. Hmmm, there's an idea, poets as Hot Springs.

    This piece shows that you have a lot of poetic talent. When you're ready you'll be back. Perhaps this is only 'till next time' .

    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]

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