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    dots Submission Name: Death to Life to Death Againdots
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    Author: Namlooc20
    ASL Info:    26/Male/Spokane, WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 359/327/107
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       This is a poem about well... why? questions... so yeah... I did this weeks ago I just haven't had time to put it on here. So yeah... here is "Death to Life to Death Again"

    - Kyle Feb 10, 2006


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    dotsDeath to Life to Death Againdots
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    Why does life go so slow?,
    When all I want is death,
    Death the natural way.
    A death with no regret.

    Why does life go so fast?,
    When we're all suposed to live,
    Live the natural life,
    Not Commit a sin.

    So why does death go so slow?,
    When all I want is to live,
    Have a reason to complete my dreams,
    Because the wire is running thin...




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      This was a great poem I think. I also have a lot of similar thoughts myself about death. I can relate sometimes to the first part, where it says "Why does life go so slow when all I want is death" I have asked that to myself, quite a few times. Again, nice poem.
    | Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      I actually like this.. Its very.. TRUE.. or for me.
    I have thought similar questions and backed it up with similar thoughts..

    If you keep your poems as nicely writen and well put as this one, you wont have any problems with me liking it.

    Good job.. Keep it up

    -Kimberley
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Blindly-N-Love | [ Reply to This ]
      We really don't wish for death though. As an escape, yes...from the pain that can be life...the misery, etc. What we really wish is that life wouldn't hurt, that it could be good, that we could know happiness.

    my opinion, anyway, after living the wishing, myself, many times...
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      Death, well, that's every man's prize in the end. It was good that you matched the speed of the stanzas with their concepts of fast and slow. Time is relative and death is coming on a black stallion. I tend to ramble and I'll be honest, I just got back from rifle and Im not very focused. I'll get back to ya later. Good Job and Mighty mighty questions you've been pondering.
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]
      I dunno...but I am going to blame it on the EPA and their guidelines for a healthy and balanced nutritional diet!


    Seriously...I think this is a very interesting write and I liked the way the stanzas accentuated the title. Fast, slow...odd, even...who knows why...some things are just mysteries, ya know?
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Hhhhmmmm. This was a rather complex set of questions you have. I think you were on to something with the first two stanzas, then kind of lost it at the end. Although I do like the last two lines. I think this stirred the reader to take stock in their lives and realize death is certain, the when of it is not. very powerful thoughts for one so young. Wsit til you get to 3o like me, then you will kill to slow down the clock! lol. A very deep and meaningful poem. Good job.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. In my opinion, you sort of lost the flow in the last stanza. But over all I have no complaints. This poem really makes you stop and think. It's deep, without being too sutle. It asks the hard questions; the ones that most people don't want to even think about. I really like that about it. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by mysterious one | [ Reply to This ]


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