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    dots Submission Name: Group Homesdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 35
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       i wrote this for my group home. i've been here a while.


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    dotsGroup Homesdots
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    Im lost again
    Another lost friend
    I moved away.
    Im lost today
    In and out
    I always pout
    Lost my trust
    Love or lust
    New boyfriends
    Relationship ends
    In a group home
    Feels so alone




    Submitted on 2006-02-10 13:34:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thank you for liking my work..I will surely be posting more and I am currently Writing a book called "The story of a girl," about my life and my past. I see you were in a group homes I, Too was a ward of the court.Incarcerated from the age of 13-19 straight in C.Y.A. Life is such a blessing and I am so excited for your future for you... It'll be ok, I promise...And this may be a time that you will need to draw upon in the future to get through something you don't even know is gonna happen yet. I send you peace.
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by Jill Lynne | [ Reply to This ]
      Group homes are sometimes essential to a childs upbringing
    In the case I am speaking of a handicapped or retarded child can fully receive love and kindness and feel like evreyone else for once surronded by those who are handicapped as well
    I never knew of group homes for any other kind of children
    You opened my eyes a liittle
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      this was alright but i thought it could of been more. the rythm wasn't that great it would start than stop than start agian . i think you should go into more detail. You a good topic but i think u didn't your best. well i don't really have anything else to say hope to hear from you and keep writng. something will come to you.
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
      i have alot of childhood memories that you speak of in your posts 30 some years ago group homes gave you some great drugs to keep you quite and out of the way they were alwaz abusive as well

    great words written and i hope they arn't as bad as they used to be
    great write and read

    thanx for previous comments next week i will post my version of group homes maybe look for it i know you will like

    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh hun...this is lonely & sad and I don't like for anyone to feel alone and hopeless. That must be difficult to be in that situation or going from place to place.
    I'm sending special blessings of Love,Peace,Joy and if you place your faith in your higher power life gets easier - I'm talking spiritually not religiously - there's a difference.

    & special smiles for you to share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I had a few friends in group homes and one of them went on to be a councelor there. They arent all that fun and I think you put that sadness of it in this write...very short and to the point. But then again...a fella named Ken Shamrock was in a group home near where I grew up for a while and he went on to be a UFC champion and a WWE superstar. Dunno what that does for ya, but it just goes to show, not all groupies are losers, ya know?

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      hey thanx fot the comment on rampage 15 it was dedicated to what i saw in group homes 35 years ago i dont worry to much about comments as writing is my past time some will like it some dont even some of the people i work with think i'm wierd as i write poetry
    oh well to each their own
    keep posting so i can read
    thanx again
    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      geez, i feel bad for you, i have only been to one group home and that was for 2 months in second grade...
    times get better just hope for those times
    ~rachelle~
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]
      well there are no other forces in this poem then grace ../. this poem is grace ../. like falling offa building (slow) and watching everything just pass you by ../.

    life is hard and there are no other words for it then ...poetry

    janus
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]
      Well put, it does make me curious about your life and adventures/losses. Thank you so much for the comment...you have a good sense of rhyme and balance, maybe work on your beat...you're doing well.
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by suneideises | [ Reply to This ]


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