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    dots Submission Name: Spring Boydots
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    Author: disco superfly
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 15/17/4
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       The title needs some work, as does the whole poem in general...


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    dotsSpring Boydots
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    To my lovely Spring boy
    and of course, his ethereal smile.
    Doves fly past my window
    why don't you stay a while?

    Now your eyes are half broken
    and it's going to make me cry.
    And so are you, with tears
    pearly-gray, straight from the sky.

    Clinging to your breath let God prevail
    Crows are screeching, blocking out my cries.
    At least this way I can ignore
    the moment of truth in all of your lies.

    The mournful dove is dying
    white feathers stained with red.
    And yet Im still in your arms
    While demons crouch over the bed.

    And the crow is gently weeping
    over the loss of love.
    Well just block out all its cries
    and read the stars above.




    Submitted on 2006-02-10 14:42:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really a deep poem that is beautifully written
    I believe you were talking about the love you and your soulmate share and at times how it looks that destiny is trying to destroy those binds
    I really liked this
    Great Job!
    God Bless
    Ron


    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      humm... what i like about your type of poetry is the mystery. It can leave the reader to really interupt it any way they wish. It doesn' actualyl explain exactly what is happening, per se. If that makes sense. It leaves me to put myself in the poem and imagine a time in life when i would have felt the same. To me, that's an excellent write. When it can make the reader feel such emotion as to put inside the poem sort of speak. Anyway.. wow.. wodnerful poem. I liked it. Going to go check out your page and see what else you got. Thanks!
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by nicklacymatthew | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like htis piece and i truly hope to read more by you. keep up the amazingly aweseome work. i know you can take your work and soar with it.
    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutely beautiful imagery. 'ethereal smile...white feathers stained in red...crow is gently weeping..." Gorgeous. I'd like to know what you think of some of my poems. : )
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by losing_focus | [ Reply to This ]


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