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    dots Submission Name: You Are...Forever Gonedots
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    Author: ArtichokeMosher
    ASL Info:    15/F/PA
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 146/201/81
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 258
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 756



    Description:
       I wrote this 3 days after my boyfriend Gary broke up with me.I was sick,stayed home from school,which made me really depressed cause no one was around.I was really bored,I found myself thinking about him all day and missing him.I found myself calling him and leaving him a message to call me back. Lemme know what you think


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    dotsYou Are...Forever Gonedots
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    I sit here staring at the phone.
    Trying to face the fact that Im all alone.
    I sat here I thought about you all day.
    I realized what happend and I'm not ok.


    Chorus:
    Your gone...

    And I still need you...
    To get through...
    This life.

    I lay here in bed.
    The thoughts stirring in my head.
    I look at the wall.
    Thats when I begin to fall.

    Chorus:
    Your gone...

    And I still need you...
    To get through...
    This life.

    I sit here I begin to cry.
    I call you up and I say my last goodbye.
    As it all turns black it begins to end.
    Say goodbye to another good friend.




    Submitted on 2006-02-10 16:01:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its good i like it alot, i havnt got any reall good comments, cuz im never really good at them

    so I LOVE THE YOUTH GROUP!

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    jokes guys jokes but i do love the youth group


    i actually hope to see more of your work, its interesting, its different, which makes it good.

    Read alot of other peoms aswell, like otha peoples, cuz its handy, and u can pik up a few new pointers from there, and like blend.

    Have fun

    Me :) xx
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by MysterydarkPoet | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked the flow. i really like htis piece and i truly hope to read more by you. keep up the amazingly aweseome work. i know you can take your work and soar with it.
    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this, but I've read a lot of poems like this today, lmao, I"ve no idea why though, lol.

    I liked your flow and the way you worded things. This was nicely done.
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]



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