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    dots Submission Name: You Are His (D2B)dots

    Author: AnointedPoetess
    ASL Info:    22/Fe/MN
    Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 127/178/49
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 797
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       This poem is dedicated to my younger sister, Brittany.

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    dotsYou Are His (D2B)dots

    Sweetheart, I know life hasn't been an easy road for you,
    Despite what so called friends and guys have done,
    There is One who will never disappoint,
    Whose love for you can't run out,
    His beloved, baby girl, and princess you have always been and forever shall be,
    It is impoosible for Him to lie nor would His promises to you break,
    His got your life all mapped and planned out,
    Even before you were born,
    He is the real father you have wanted and proud of you He is,
    For you Brittany, are His precious one now and eternally,
    So when things get rough and you can't see your way out,
    Call on Jesus who will come to your rescue and see you through,
    Never give up, never give in, He's always going to be with you, even until the very end,
    You are His beloved and He loves you for you!.

    Submitted on 2006-02-10 16:43:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You seem to have a nice relationship with your writing and your beliefs:) I'm groovin' on your continued use of the parallels between royalty and the trinity. Very nice touch.

    The form is free, I can see, but the big block of text is overwhelming. Try breaking down you lines to single images and ideas to help the flow, and then investigate ways to really boil out the most important messages.

    Thanks for sharing!

    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by Cigarz | [ Reply to This ]
      hey. great poem. i am glad there are still religious people in this dark day and age.. i have seen very few religious people as of late... however i do feel as if i am religious and it is somewhat painful to have your religion put down as often as it is... sorry... i am ranting... but i liked your poem alot...
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by SickenedChild | [ Reply to This ]

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