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    dots Submission Name: Flashbackdots
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    Author: nosferotu_gurl
    ASL Info:    24/female/wa
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 140/165/67
    Words: 508
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 654
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 3550



    Description:
       Long..just a warning.I dont know if you'll understand it but I had to put it down.I broke down in tears from flashbacks and I had to find a way to stop.A future that blinds the past...hmmm.Havent found one yet.Comment if you want.later


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    Born in spring
    All new and bright
    Yet her future exposed
    In the dark of night
    To dreaming mother
    Of broken past
    Didnít face it
    Till child asked
    Will I grow old
    Married and rich
    Iíll buy you all
    Get you out of the ditch
    Blue eyed angel
    Oh so sweet
    Forever innocent
    Wished to keep
    But somewhere lost
    In lifeís script
    One mistake
    Wings were ripped
    Hate and resentment
    Pain and silent darkness
    Smiles to tears
    Recoiling from comforts caress
    No love in heart
    Out of fear
    Alone, betrayed
    No one could hear
    Her crying out
    In silent tongue
    Dear God help
    A girl so young
    Tired of isolation
    She opens her heart
    Tries once with love
    Doomed from the start
    Runs to mask and walls
    Fate gave second chance
    Her broken heart patched
    She took the second glance
    Perfect till unintended mistake
    Dream turned nightmare
    Knowing the answer
    She asks where
    Did it go wrong
    Can I rewrite this song
    Look in the mirror
    And cry too see
    That this fucked tale
    Is of me
    But what you donít know
    The second tale
    Hidden behind
    Another veil
    Sit and understand
    If you can
    The mother tried so hard
    Yet lost her grip
    Frustrated
    Just one sip
    Became a habit
    Couldnít hack it
    Slicing words
    You failure child
    But in the morning
    Lost in denial
    Canít remember
    So asks why
    Is my angel bruised?
    Begins to cry
    To realize the truth
    Did anyone hear
    Dishes breaking
    Did anyone know
    Perfection faking
    No one said a god damned thing
    If so mom came out clean
    Avoiding home
    She runs away
    To drunk or high
    Wishing to stay
    In the dream so real
    No tears or pain
    Joy she feels
    But down she comes
    So blood runs
    Release the pain
    Scream frustration in the rain
    Why God me
    Canít you see
    I cant take it
    Ive about lost it
    Fail school, skip chores
    Writing out all your sores
    Counseling and pills
    Cant take and kill
    Her pain or issues
    Not a tissue
    Can cure whatís hidden
    Cant they see the bruises
    Hidden under her shirt
    Cant they see
    In her eyes the hurt
    Silent she sits as they take notes
    They donít know whith what she copes
    Just one peep of the truth
    Results in just one more bruise
    Run, get cuffed
    Put in a cell
    I was safe
    From my hell
    Till caring mother
    Came to get her
    Smile n say
    Glad were back together
    Then go rumors
    From people blind
    Another pain
    Begins to unwind
    You all are deaf
    And cant fuckin see
    Thereís nothing wrong with me
    Iím not suicidal
    Not anorexic
    Not insane
    And not stuck up
    I have anger
    Not my fault
    I did cut
    Not your result
    But for a while all was cured
    Then broke down
    Under a year
    Im done trying to stand it all
    So in the darkness
    May I fall
    I close my eyes
    Say goodbye
    For me I plea
    Please donít cry
    BS




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    ||| Comments |||
      God hasn't failed you. I promise. If you ever had the peace that surpasses all understanding, please, remember it!
    "You will keep him in perfect peace,
    Whose mind is stayed on You,
    Because he trusts in You.
    Trust in the LORD forever,
    For in the LORD is everlasting strength."
    (Isaiah 26:3, NKJV)
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by Aelfled | [ Reply to This ]
      This has emotional thoughts and ideas. Only the flow was choppy. It would flow then drop, flow then drop. Its all good thought. I just hate the [censored] you go through within yourself. The only one who can make things better for you is you, and god. It just hurts me when you get like this. Anyways, good write I guess.
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by nasuka | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow i never seen this type of technique before. You are very talented. A little long but it kept me intrested to see if you could keep it up and you nailed it. Very nice job
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by melody10977 | [ Reply to This ]


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