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    dots Submission Name: Princess Crystaldots
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    Author: AnointedPoetess
    ASL Info:    22/Fe/MN
    Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 127/178/49
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsPrincess Crystaldots
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    I am a princess and He is the king,
    I can ask for anything in His name and by faith I shall recieve,
    There is nothing to hard for Him to do,
    If only I believe,
    In Him, my wildest dreams can be achieved,
    In His arms of love He holds me while letting me know that I am indeed still His,
    Through the hard times He will be with me,
    Guiding and keeping me day by day,
    Like a loving father He shall protect me,
    Nothing I have to fear because He is for me and not against,
    I Him for who He has created me to be,
    My calling and destiny in Him has already been set,
    His hand picked and chosen am I,
    In him is a safety only He can hold and can be found in Him,
    He wants a one on one relationship with me,
    Between father and daughter only,
    So that He can share His heart and I mine,
    Always willing and able to fight my battles,
    when they get to hard,
    So when the enemy comes with his lies I know God will be right beside me to help me through,
    And that it'll be alright,
    He'll rescue me out of the devils hands when I stray or go to far,
    For my Daddy God is always with me and that makes me love Him all the more,
    Because He is my Daddy and I am in the palm of His eternal hand.




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    ||| Comments |||
      I was thinking of "I am a magnet, and he is Steel" or perhaps vice versa. A very nice piece all around.

    There are a few instances where metaphors could be placed. And in religious imagery, your horizon is unlimited. Parables, pslams... so much out there!

    The piece is very strong as is, but I can't help thinking it could be so much more.

    Thanks for sharing!

    Todd
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by Cigarz | [ Reply to This ]
      i am not religious myself,
    but i like this poem. It kinda , for a moment,
    believed me to understand how it would
    be to have a relationship with god.
    very good and well described. keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by skinnard | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW, that was great!!!!!! im a Christian myself.....i got a relationship with Jesus Christ and hes amazing, he saved me so many times, not just my soul, but in life, ill never let him go, hes my father, my friend, and my love, and its so beautiful to read stuff like this, fills me with joy....i really feel the Lord with you in your words, God is awesome and i LOOOOVED THIS

    KEEP IT GOIN PRINCESS!!!!
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by eyez | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing...I see the fact that I have been calling you Princess is really working. This is amazingly written...It could be more than this, and I sense there is more of this kind of poetry within you. Keep it up and God will release...Remember...The more you meditate, the more you write.
    Love,
    Momma
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by E.S. McLaughlin | [ Reply to This ]


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