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Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 136
Class/Type: Poetry /BrokenHeart
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Let me carve into my soul
The words you never said
Let the icy drips
Run down my back
Fill my heart with the warmth
You never gave
Let the scars remain on my wrist
Flash backs of how wrong we were
Is love supposed to feel like this?
You said you cared,
How could you have?
You were never there.
Gave you my everything,
Was that not enough for you?
Cut to the core…
I hate to love you,
The truth lingers
In the mirror forever trapped
Till told-
I realise
You’ll always be
Where you never were-
In my heart
Playing me like a puppet on a string-
Calling out,
Crying myself to sleep,
Stop playing with me-
All I wanted was for you to love me.

Submitted on 2006-02-10 17:14:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "You'll always be where you never where-in my heart" really clenched it for me. I've felt this way before and it was so nice to see it expressed so wonderfully. Beautiful is all there is to say, good job!
| Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by devildoll | [ Reply to This ]
  you said it perfectly and its easy as that. i really love this. this is awesome and i like the way its formatted and whatnot. its how i feel in everyone and you said it just great. im really glad that i read this but i see yet dont see how the title goes. but its still all good and you did a great job.

| Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
  Ok, the line "Cut to the core" totally did it for me. With the scars on your wrists, it all just tied together and all the jigsaw pieces just fitted nicely. The only thing I didn't understand was "In the mirror trapped" What was that suppose to mean? Apart from that, overall a well written poem!
| Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by sapphire109 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, this was a really sweet poem. I liked this a lot. I especially loved the morbid words you used near the beginning, like carving the words you never said into your soul and stuff. That was pretty cool.
| Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]

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