Description: OK for this i just typed in the box whatever came into my head so cut me some slack!
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Have you ever felt so empty
That you feel you're coming and going?
Have you ever felt so dead
That the butterflies in your stomach are moths
Eating you from the inside out
They never getting any further
Any further from the centre
So the pain never stops
Never stops until you die
You can look out across the globe
And see what happens in the world
But nobody seems to hurt like you
Nobody seems to pain like you
I feel empty when I'm without her
But when I'm with her it doesn't matter
Time doesn't stand still though
It speeds up
It gives me a taste of joy
Of Love
And takes it almost instantly
Before I start to talk
It's already time to go
And I regret everything
I regret where I am
I regret who I am
and there are times
That I regret what I am
"I hate myself and I want to die"
A great man once said that
Would I have his courage?
To pull the trigger
To slice my wrists
Death holds no fear
Because I know I will rise
Like a Pheonix
A Pheonix from the flames
And we would be together
Evermore
this was nice i dont mean the happy little bunnys nice i mean the well written well semi-thought out nice i am positive the answer to you question is yes from ever one in the world the best/worst thing about this situation is that their all just recycled feelings and what i find the most depressing about this situation is that those feelings will always be here and never belong to just you
And you said, all this just spewed out of you right? lol. Well, it looks like you are in Heartbreak Hotel...and won't be checking out tonight. This was very erractic at times, like a overflow of words and emotions. I liked the metaphors and the honest imagery you used. It made your pain seem more real. It just seem it was not organized or strung together to make a full impact to the reader as you wished for it to. Don't get me wrong, this was very good. I would revise just a bit and make it more coherent in thought pattern. Nice work.
luke, this is magnificent... there was one stanza in particular that caught my eye,
"You can look out across the globe And see what happens in the world But nobody seems to hurt like you Nobody seems to pain like you"
that pretty much sums up why i'm so addicted to music, the sad music in particular. it comforts me to know that there really are other people out there that hurt at least as much as i do. lovely words, keep up the writing, you've definately got a talent for it.
Nothing makes any sense in the world, and you feel so alone. Nothing seems to liven you except for this one person. The one person you long to be with, but is so out of your reach. A conversation with her seems to bring you to life, yet she is taken away so quickly that it hardly seems worth it. Then you go to say that you do not have the courage to kill yourself. Killing one's self really isn't about courage, but more like taking the easy way out. Yes it does take guts to it, but in the end the only thing remember is that you were a coward for not being able to face life.
Nice write. I like the random thoughts that seem to come into one.
Submission Name: LXIX
