you don't get it
it's too hard to understand
the numbing sensation
that i get
i can't get away
i can't fight it back
i try to take it in
but that's not what it wants
"It" is the numbness
that i can't do anything with
i can't take it in
i can't fight it back
i think ur missing some words...can't away i can't fight it i try take it in like whats with i cant away i cant fly away i cant bleed away...idk i like how u discribe "IT" was "it" suppost to be like u or ur feelings or anger b/e thats the impresstion i got
Gripping your fist so tight that the feeling in it is all lost because your finger nails are going into your palm. It takes all of your power to keep your hands at you side when you are angry. All the will power in you, so that when you are done and you look at your palm you see the cresent shaped finger nail prints, even when you have short nails.
I'm sorry if I am way off, but this is what I got from the poem. There are a few things you could fix up, but over all it wasn't bad. You are only 12? You still have a while to perfect your technique, though I am 18 and my writings will never be perfect. As you grow up you learn more things and you try different kinds of writings. Never give up!
It looks as if you are missing words in the poem to make a complete sentence. Without that is is a good poem. Short poems are fun to write. The poem has a good flow and such. But the missing words throw the poem off totaly.
Submission Name: numbed
