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    dots Submission Name: Campbell’s Chicken Noodle Soupdots
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    Author: beth freese
    ASL Info:    18.F.Earth
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 74/113/39
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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       my friend and i have "the soup can" for when we get sick and give it to one another and i was just staring at it. and this happened. it's sorta sad...but i'm not...the soup can makes me happy but that was a good ending i thought. any comments are welcome.


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    dotsCampbell’s Chicken Noodle Soupdots
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    Soup is how you know
    Someone cares.
    About your
    Sick, achy, cold, tired
    Body.

    Soup is how you know
    You won’t die
    Or want to
    Even at the very worst time
    In your life
    Ever.

    Soup is how you know
    That there is something
    Warm out there
    Just for you
    A can just for you

    Soup is how you know
    It will be ok.
    That everything
    Might turn out alright
    But if nothing else
    You will turn out alright

    Soup is how you know.

    And I don’t
    Even
    Have a can opener.




    Submitted on 2006-02-10 21:54:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Andy would be proud.

    Some sweet images and connections with the meanings we attach to things. Symbols can be so important in our lives.

    I would not eat soup for many years. Then I realized it was because that is what my mother gave me when I was sick. It was twenty or more years after her death before I could enjoy soup and feel the love that connected to it.

    Thank you for giving me these images. Great ending as well.

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha I like this write, its comedic with a moral. The last line makes the poem and is awsome. To imagine you have the best thing and no way to get it to it,what a tradgety. Next you should write about the search for the can opener, I would read it.
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by Alura | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't relate to soup. But I did like the last line very much. Quite amusing little piece. But why tinned soup? Surely real soup would be more signifying of love? Or is that the satire?
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by Edna Sweetlove | [ Reply to This ]
      Soup is how you know was indeed over done here but I have to agree with maggie it would make a nice hallmark card for a sick friend and the last line was a funny little kicker keep up the good work
    adnil
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]
      The ending was quite funny. I think this would make for a nice Hallmark card, complete with little cartoons. As a poem, it was a little off with it's flow. And I think you repeated "soup is how you know" more than nessacary. But overall, this was really sweet. I am glad you have a friend or a "soup buddy" you can rely on. You were right, soup do make a world of difference when you are ill. I think this was nicely written.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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