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    dots Submission Name: those lime green pillsdots
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    Author: sweet sorenity
    ASL Info:    24/f/ Ga
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 211/221/58
    Words: 306
    Class/Type: Misc/
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       this i just wrote im on extecy thats what this is about ok bye


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    dotsthose lime green pillsdots
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    its amasing how those little things can bring you together
    after some thing tares you apart
    those beautiful pices of magic that alow you to think with your heart

    i thought i hated you
    i thought we were through
    but tonight you came back
    in that little plastic sack

    i think i love you
    i really do
    that lime green coating around you
    god i think my love is true

    i could have swarn i was done
    but you fill me with glee
    i know im young
    but i just cant help but remember the things you did to me

    is it wrong to retrace my tracks
    now theirs no turning back
    i think your here to stay
    but i want you to go away

    i feel so uncleen
    but i cant help but feen
    i injessed you one by one two bye two
    i just cant keep away from you

    my little green friend
    i think this might be the end
    i love you i do but i cant go on like this
    altho you are pure bliss

    tonight could be the last
    i sit back smoke and watch as time begins to pass
    i dont want this to end not now not ever
    but i must try to be cleaver
    good bye and good night
    i can win this fight

    i will miss you i will
    but iv had my fill
    or at least i think
    but i could change my mind in one simple blink

    maby just a nother for the road
    just to get me in a happier mode
    ummmm i look at you and wonder if i should take just one more
    but what for


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      Hey i like this hahaha i guess im not the only one who writes about drugs. im adding this to my favs, good job on this i really like it
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      Besides some spelling errors its a pretty good write, but it scares me because I know how much of a addict you can be...and X is not something to get addicted to and live much longer.
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by MaxHam | [ Reply to This ]
      OK you forced me to comment s here it is...all I can say is I liked it and like a lot of your stuff it makes me smile. Especally after vaugly knowing you it makes me laugh!
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by irvine_valentin | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this one. The only problems I saw were in the first stanza you spelled pieces wrong, and in the fifth stanza you put thiers instead of theres. Other than that I liked this one! Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by nasuka | [ Reply to This ]
      Lil mama,

    You have a few mispelled words but I like the poem. You expressed yourself in quite an astounding way. You put in poetic form about your relationship with ecstacy. You are far more talented than you even know. I can see you making it big as a writer. I am going to start a poetry site for young writer's to get noticed.
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by B-Gentle | [ Reply to This ]


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