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    dots Submission Name: the hitchhikerdots

    Author: dustyshelves
    ASL Info:    17
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 44/54/15
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       it could take more work, but the idea is there.

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    dotsthe hitchhikerdots

    a narrow focus trembles and fans across the vanishing point
    where the empty hands of clouds scrape the low horizon,
    painting blindly; painting paths he thought his feet could fall upon.

    wild imagination, you lift the stars that grade the sea; the sky
    that knows its vastness, but not what it blankets.
    and the spokesman for vehicles is treading water beneath.

    another yellow line swept away by tar, his feet following
    a nuance coated in salinity; coated in a dark night who bellows
    "follow me far and past a map's security; disregard the key".

    and the spokesman for vehicles can't afford his own, his eyes -
    pressed curtains shading his cheekbones, offering apology
    but no regret to eternity.

    the moon lifts a smile to guide bare soles, across the soul of the land
    the hitchhiker knows only, the bare back of his hand.

    Submitted on 2006-02-11 07:24:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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