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    dots Submission Name: One Last Prayerdots
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    Author: ArtichokeMosher
    ASL Info:    15/F/PA
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 146/201/81
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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    dotsOne Last Prayerdots
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    Can't sleep...
    Afraid of my own nightmare.
    All I can do is weep...
    Because you're no longer there.

    Now I'm an insomniac...
    Gone wild,crazy,and insane.
    I know I can't get you back...
    And the sadness will forever remain.

    Chorus:
    I've had no fear...
    With you by my side.
    And if you were still here...
    I'd sleep at night.

    Now you're gone...
    And it's all done.
    I've done wrong...
    Once again fucked up when I could have won.

    So I go home.
    I lay in bed.
    I lay alone.
    I pray to God tommorrow I'll wake dead.

    Chorus:
    I've had no fear...
    With you by my side.
    And if you were still here...
    I'd sleep at night.

    The fear comes back...
    The fear will always remain.
    My whole world turns to black...
    As my tears of blood flow like the pouring rain.




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