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    dots Submission Name: amillion questions yet no answerdots
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    Author: sweet sorenity
    ASL Info:    24/f/ Ga
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 211/221/58
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 709
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       the come down well in the miscs of the come down yea any way i hope you enjoy


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    sit and stair
    into thin air
    what do you see but a glimps of the pased and no hope for the future
    this is pure tourture
    but theirs nothing left to say nothing left to do
    if only "he" knew

    heaven or hell
    is it to soon to tell
    we'v committed no crime
    but have shurely done our share of time
    a tear glides into your lap
    you have no direction you have torn up your map

    two cross roads which to take
    please be you dont act fake
    but can you choose in the blink of an eye
    tell the truth please dont lie

    can you make this one simple choice
    dont be shy show your voice
    can you do it in one snap
    or are you stuck in this trap

    you know just as much as me
    and thats a horrid way to be
    is their more out their for us all
    or is it a bottemless pit in which we continue to fall

    their are no answers for these things i ask
    we are all to bussey hidding behind our masks







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      Very very good. I couldn't have written it better...we share these same thoughts. The entire poem was very interesting to read even though there were some errors.
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by MaxHam | [ Reply to This ]
      a tear glides into your lap
    you have no direction you have torn up your map

    these were my favorite lines. i thought this was really good and i'm gonna put it on my fave. yeah u do spell pretty bad though. it's all good, i love ur poetry and ur 3 year old grammar and spelling skills. just kidding
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree the misspelling doesn't stp this from being a great poem. This one made me smile because it was very good, not because you're crazy!
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by irvine_valentin | [ Reply to This ]
      I dont care if there were mispelled words in this one, I liked it and the subjuct/thoughts of this one are very true. I like reading your stuff. Keep posting!
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by nasuka | [ Reply to This ]


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