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    dots Submission Name: nonedots

    Author: ariadne
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 99/85/26
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       If anyone really understands what it is to progress beyond this life, they'll understand this dilemma. Not suicide!!!!!!!!!

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    He placed me on my funeral pyre
    and handed me my match
    said if I were ready for the fire
    touch my light to the thatch

    I'd felt the dying need to burn
    I let this become me
    not knowing that the flames could turn
    and become engulfing

    I'm needing more than this world could give
    I'm needing something new
    craving to keep myself and to live
    the fire will bring me truth

    Atop my pyre I built with my hands
    looking into my eyes
    My mind and body too weak to stand
    I thought I knew this guy

    Things I wished I'd never seen nor heard
    stored up within my shelves
    He stroked my hair and gantly whispered
    "love, we all burn ourselves"

    Submitted on 2004-04-30 15:18:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lemme guess, you're a teenager, right? And you like the Doors, and certain new crap. Its not horrible, but it doesn't stand out much from most of the stuff all the other teenage girls write.
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this but sorta agree w/ below. most teenagers write stuff like this, yeah im one of them, but try to avoid it. i liked it, but maybe you should use "guy"

    I thought I knew this guy

    That line is very weak, and meaningless.
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by roxygirl239 | [ Reply to This ]

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