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    dots Submission Name: Pretty Girls Should Never Crydots
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    Author: Glassy Eyed
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 550/427/187
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 708
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       My boyfriend always tells me that pretty girls should never cry, so i wrote a poem about whats going on in my life and incorrpurated(sp?) his saying in it...it's sweet...


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    dotsPretty Girls Should Never Crydots
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    Tears trickle down her face,
    Smudging her mascara coated eyes,
    The tears seem out of place,
    But all she wants is to die.

    A pillow keeps sobs smothered
    But the noise rings clear in her ears,
    She doesn't want to be bothered,
    They brought to life her darkest fears.

    She was now truly alone
    Every night and day
    She felt like they wanted her to be a drone
    So she saw she had to do thing's her own way.

    But she also saw what really mattered,
    The warmth in his eyes,
    As he looked at her, scarred and tattered,
    He said, "Pretty girls should never cry."

    He held her close
    And wiped her tears
    He kissed her nose
    And chased away her darkest fears.




    Submitted on 2006-02-11 23:13:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved this poem, totally, this is goin on my favs. I even have tears in my eyes, I've been goin thru alot lately. So this is a very pretty poem. im not quite sure what you ment by drone, I had to look it up, but I got the idea that it ment not moving/not working/sitting around basicly something like that. but if I got the wrong idea, then just tell me.
    but wonderful poem thru
    | Posted on 2006-02-12 00:00:00 | by KimmyBoo | [ Reply to This ]


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