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Real Dream


Author: Hip-Hop Honey
ASL Info:    16/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105 /86 /31
Words: 133
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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This is a song/poem that I wrote for Mylo...It is also my perspectaive on him leaving..This also says alot about me..Anyways hope you like it


Real Dream



Please don't wake me
From this beautiful dream
I've always pictured
You standing by me
Take my hand
Slip on a ring
And with this you say
We can do anything
But now your leaving me
This is the real deal
Don't know what to say
Don't know what to feel
I guess this for real boy
I'm letting you go
But before you leave
I want you to know
I'll always be waiting here for you
Always keep dreaming
This much is true
I'll picture you here by me
Then I'll know you'll always
Be next to me
My love for you will always grow
Even if you live in Toronto
And this boy here is
My dreamy reality
That's why I say
This is a real dream




Submitted on 2006-02-11 23:22:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The Name real dream really didn't go witht he flow of the poem but it had a good idea for the poem. I really hope you and dylan work out cuz u need to get over Mylo. It's hard ot give over someoen as much as him, and I've noticed all your poems are about Passion and love. Well I got two challeneges for you 1)Write a dark poem about anger with someoen or the way you hate something and 2) write something that is kinda personal but is more of a metaphorical way of showing your feelings like my poem Coming up for Ait give those a try you need ot variey your poem stills lvoe ya lady
=Logan=
| Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]


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