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    dots Submission Name: Real Dreamdots
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    Author: Hip-Hop Honey
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105/86/31
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 879
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    Description:
       This is a song/poem that I wrote for Mylo...It is also my perspectaive on him leaving..This also says alot about me..Anyways hope you like it


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    dotsReal Dreamdots
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    Please don't wake me
    From this beautiful dream
    I've always pictured
    You standing by me
    Take my hand
    Slip on a ring
    And with this you say
    We can do anything
    But now your leaving me
    This is the real deal
    Don't know what to say
    Don't know what to feel
    I guess this for real boy
    I'm letting you go
    But before you leave
    I want you to know
    I'll always be waiting here for you
    Always keep dreaming
    This much is true
    I'll picture you here by me
    Then I'll know you'll always
    Be next to me
    My love for you will always grow
    Even if you live in Toronto
    And this boy here is
    My dreamy reality
    That's why I say
    This is a real dream




    Submitted on 2006-02-11 23:22:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The Name real dream really didn't go witht he flow of the poem but it had a good idea for the poem. I really hope you and dylan work out cuz u need to get over Mylo. It's hard ot give over someoen as much as him, and I've noticed all your poems are about Passion and love. Well I got two challeneges for you 1)Write a dark poem about anger with someoen or the way you hate something and 2) write something that is kinda personal but is more of a metaphorical way of showing your feelings like my poem Coming up for Ait give those a try you need ot variey your poem stills lvoe ya lady
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    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]


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