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    dots Submission Name: Play Medots
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    Author: DiamondTears
    ASL Info:    20/F/Wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 66/109/57
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 796
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 512



    Description:
       Dont play me, But dont bash this poem please.


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    dotsPlay Medots
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    You rain on me
    Try and drown me out
    But I still speak my words
    That you will never know
    So tell me are you in or are you out
    I wont play with you
    Unless your dedicated to me
    Don't dance in circles
    Go left or right
    Cause the club isn't open at dead of night,
    So make your choice.
    Iím not your game
    Either get in or get out,
    Iím not a one night stand
    Are you even a real man?
    I donít play that game.




    Submitted on 2006-02-12 02:10:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i liked this..the end kind of threw me though...i think it could've been alittle bit stronger...but overal it was a good peice. i cant chose my favorite lines...the only lines that aren't my favorite are the last four...really the last two...the last two could be changed.
    well good lluck. im going to check out more of your stuff...keep writting
    xoxo
    me
    | Posted on 2006-02-12 00:00:00 | by 2Numb | [ Reply to This ]


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