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Author: DiamondTears
ASL Info:    20/F/Wa
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 66 /109 /57
Words: 88
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Dont play me, But dont bash this poem please.


Play Me



You rain on me
Try and drown me out
But I still speak my words
That you will never know
So tell me are you in or are you out
I wont play with you
Unless your dedicated to me
Don't dance in circles
Go left or right
Cause the club isn't open at dead of night,
So make your choice.
I’m not your game
Either get in or get out,
I’m not a one night stand
Are you even a real man?
I don’t play that game.




Submitted on 2006-02-12 02:10:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i liked this..the end kind of threw me though...i think it could've been alittle bit stronger...but overal it was a good peice. i cant chose my favorite lines...the only lines that aren't my favorite are the last four...really the last two...the last two could be changed.
well good lluck. im going to check out more of your stuff...keep writting
xoxo
me
| Posted on 2006-02-12 00:00:00 | by 2Numb | [ Reply to This ]


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