Play Me

Author: DiamondTears ASL Info:    20/F/Wa Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 66 /109 /57 Words: 88

Class/Type: Poetry /Love Total Views: 817 Average Vote:    No vote yet. Bytes: 518

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Play Me

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You rain on me Try and drown me out But I still speak my words That you will never know So tell me are you in or are you out I wont play with you Unless your dedicated to me Don't dance in circles Go left or right Cause the club isn't open at dead of night, So make your choice. I’m not your game Either get in or get out, I’m not a one night stand Are you even a real man? I don’t play that game.

Submitted on 2006-02-12 02:10:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i liked this..the end kind of threw me though...i think it could've been alittle bit stronger...but overal it was a good peice. i cant chose my favorite lines...the only lines that aren't my favorite are the last four...really the last two...the last two could be changed. well good lluck. im going to check out more of your stuff...keep writting xoxo me

| Posted on 2006-02-12 00:00:00 | by 2Numb | [ Reply to This ]

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